It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought close together. Include any relevant example from your experience.

A family is an important part of the civilization. Since
very
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the very first day
first
day, we are surrounded among a group of people who share with us our good and bad situations. Taking care of each other, support and love are crucial components of every family, and that makes it special as
group
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a group
the group
.
However
, people believe that some things have changed over
past few decades
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the past few decades
and family does not present to people same emotion and connection as it used to present. Many people are trying to find what are evident reasons why
this
negative trend is happening.
Firstly
, modern technologies have caused some negative effects on
family
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the family
. The most of children nowadays have smartphones and they instantly ignore their
surrounding
the environmental condition
surroundings
, including an interaction with family members.
This
type of an unconscious ignoring others has shown as
crucial reason
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a crucial reason
how technologies can negatively affect on relationships.
Secondly
, in order to earn more money, parents have to work longer. While dedicating to career, mother of
father
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the father
usually forgets that they should spend more
time
with children and consider a child as biggest priority.
Lastly
, work can bring to parents a lot of worries and stress, which can influence on their willingness to interact with children.
However
, there are some advices how to change
this
downward trend. In order to solve communication issues with children, parents should show to them that they care about children and
spen
pass time in a specific way
spend
spin
spine
as
much as possible
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much time as possible
time
together.
Additionally
, work should not be
priority
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a priority
for those who want to have a family, ad they should dedicate on spending
time
with a child. What is more, parents should teach children how important and valuable is to have someone’s support and love
such
ones from family. In conclusion, family will always be an important aspect of anyone’s life. In my opinion, in order to have a better communication with a child, parents all those negative effects on relationships people should avoid and enjoy in
time
they spend together.
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