In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend.

Many people say that people now consider shopping as their hobby rather than household tasks. While
this
trend can be positive to some extent, I would argue that it is more negative. On the one hand, shopping can be beneficial in some ways.
Firstly
, because of a hectic schedule at work and boredom, shopping can serve as entertaining activities to help people to relieve their stress and refresh their minds.
For example
, after a
wearing
producing exhaustion
wearying
day at school and offices, my family
usually go
Suggestion
usually goes
is usually going
to a shopping mall to have an enjoyable time.
This
can help people to reach a better living standard or even have more motivation to work more efficiently. Without shopping activities, it is hard for them to relax and to reduce work pressure.
Secondly
, due to huge influxes of people going shopping every day, more shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
and stores will be built, which have to employ a great number of workers.
As a result
, people may find it much easier to seek employment, which contributes to the development of the nation’s economy.
On the other hand
, I believe that the potential drawbacks of shopping are more significant. Primarily, since there are a great number of people having extravagant buying habits, many companies take advantage of it to increase the price of products.
This
may place a heavy financial burden on consumers.
In addition
, in order to satisfy personal hobbies of shopping, people now tend to make many purchase decisions
although
they do not truly need it.
For instance
, my sister who is an online shopping addict often purchases many clothes that she only wears once.
This
may lead to a waste of money. In conclusion, while shopping has several positive impacts, I agree with the idea that the drawbacks of
this
tendency are greater.
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