Scientist agree that many people eat too much junk food and it is damanging their health. Some people think that this problem can be solved by education people while others believe that this education will not work. Discuss buth view and give your opinion.
many communities assume that
this
problem can be addressed by teaching the community
while
others question its practicality. Personally, this
writer doubts the effectiveness of education in dealing with this
issue.
It must be acknowledged that education can raise the community
's awareness about the harmful impact of junk
food
on their health. This
approach can be conducted by showing the bad impact of junk
food
such
as diabetes, cardiovascular disease and osteoporosis. As a result
, if people
realize the negative impact of junk
food
on their health, they will restrict eating them.
However
, some individuals believe that this
habit is ineffective. For
this
reason, this
approach only works with people
who are open-minded. Therefore
, it is only effective with the majority of the community
and cannot be applied on a large scale. Research conducted by dieticians shows that after warning students about the impacts of junk
food
, many people
still consume that food
because they cannot resist their carving.
Personally, this
writer doubts the effectiveness of this
method. Today, the community
appreciate productivity and they have to work hard and have less time to prepare food
themselves. Therefore
, eating fast food
helps them to save and have more time for other activities. To illustrate this
, many people
admit that they usually buy fast food
for breakfast and eat it while
travelling to work to save time.
In conclusion, education can be used to mitigate the negative effects of fast food
on a community
’s health but this
technique is not always true with all society. Therefore
, this
writer concludes that this
habit should not be used on a large scaleSubmitted by [email protected]
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Introduction
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Examples
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Overall
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Content
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Your opinion
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