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Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism brings more advantages or disadvantages to a country?

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Travelling to various countries has always been a fascination for people to experience and appreciate conventional heritage and
culture
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.
Tourism
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 has flourished by leaps and bounds and countries greatly promote and support
tourism
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. I too believe, that encouraging
tourism
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 has more benefits than drawbacks. In
this
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 essay, we will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of promoting
tourism
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. To embark on, undoubtedly, inviting people from assorted
culture
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, races and geographies enhance the
monetory
relating to or involving money
monetary
monitoring
countribution
the part played by a person in bringing about a result
contribution
contributions
 to government which help in
development
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the development
 of the country and facilities to the citizens.
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, tourist throng to countless historic sites which unveil the potential for trades for small handicraft businesses and have a positive influence on the income source for their living.
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,
tourism
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 plays a vital role in building relationship between nations and people. Visiting other countries can lead to an appreciation of the local
culture
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 and helps build relationships between people leading to a better mutual understanding and a higher level of tolerance.
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, having more tourists visiting historic and heritage sites can lead to difficulties in maintenance and
detoriation
a symptom of reduced quality or strength
deterioration
 of
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 value. It is important that cultural and scenic places are protected for future generations.
Manier
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 times tourists
demonstrates
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demonstrate
 resentment due to confinement basis local laws. Tourist may not understand all the aspects of the
culture
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 they are
visiting but
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visiting, but
 they need to understand they are guests and must behave appropriately. According to me, the merits of
tourism
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 outnumbered
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 demerits.
Tourism
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 plays a significant role in
nations growth
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the nation's growth
nation's growth
 and inculcate symphony and harmony between nations and release political tensions.
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