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Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Several countries do a lot of expenditure on training sportsmen competing in global sporting competitions. While I do agree that proper training facilities should be provided to athletes, it should impact the monetary allocations for other public projects and should be based on countries available resources. A lot of times small developing nations spend an enormous amount of money for training
there
of them or themselves
their
 athletes just to satisfy the ego of the people in power. Resources are pulled back from essential public schemes in the name of hollow national pride,
for
example several
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example, several
 developing nations send their teams overseas for training and spend a large amount funds on the same. Sometimes
this
also
 leads to corruption and government workers
take
Suggestion
to take
 cutbacks for organizing
such
 trips.
Furthermore
this
 does not help the general public and does not aid in making their lives easier.These decisions should be based on the nation's economy and funding power and should not be done just because other large nations are doing it.
On the other hand
this
 money could have been invested in public schemes like building better roads, schools and hospitals. The general population of the country uses these facilities and investing in them would
also
 help in improving the country's economy.
This
 would
also
 improve the lives of the general public. Resources can
also
 be directed
in
Suggestion
at
to
 improving the local sporting infrastructure so that a large number of citizens can leverage it to train better rather than a few individuals. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
 would say that investing huge amount of public funds in training few individuals should be avoided and should never be done at the expense of other public welfare programs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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