Education for young people is important in many countries. However, the others think government should spend more money for education in adult population who can not read and write. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the modern world,

education

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is

increadibly

not easy to believe

incredibly

essential

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to

everyone not

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everyone, not

only children but

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adult. There

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is

an idea that authority should give more

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to help adults who are unable to read or write. In my opinion,

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refers to the speaker or writer

I

tend to agree with that suggest because it could change many lives. Apparently, people are living in an erratic world where we need to roughly compete with others to have an excellent

lives

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life

. One of the most important factors that could

affects

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affect

on people is knowledge,

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might be the shortest and easiest (way) to gain achievement today. In many cases, a lot of people did not have opportunities to access to educational system when they were young, because of hunger and poverty that push them to work in

early lives

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the early lives

(ages). Despite many people still do well at

thier

of them or themselves

their

there

job,

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sometimes they could struggle to communicate with others in many circumstances.

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, people could have chances to obtain better living condition because when they can read or write

,

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,

they might be able to apply in more brilliant job as officer

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of hands working.

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,

education

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could change the awareness of many people, thanks to

education

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that could allow us to think outside of the box.

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, in my region there

are have

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have had

some night (extra) class for those

adult

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adults

who do not have

capacity

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the capacity

(are unable to) to deal with words

.

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.

Having said that, the nation's

budget

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have

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has

a limit (national

budget

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is limited),

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,

politicial

involving or characteristic of politics or parties or politicians

political

leaders should give priority for children or other aspects need to be concerned. In

this

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case, government should take into account about the

number

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amount

of money they spend on helping adult. In conclusion,

authorities particularly

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authorities, particularly

might release a certain

extent amount

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extent, amount

extensive amount

extensive extensive amount

extended amount

of

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budget

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the budget

that is

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really great to provide everyone opportunities that could help their lives better.