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Although more and more people read the news on internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that a growing number of people are using the Internet in order to find out the latest news. While newspapers are still popular, I strongly disagree that most people will continue to rely on them as a source of news. The
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 reason for my view relates to the increasing use of the Internet around the world. Today, a growing number of people have access to online news via technological gadgets
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 as smart phones or tablets, so they do not need to buy a newspaper to obtain news. Even in more remote corners of the world, access to the Internet is becoming more widespread and the online community is growing daily.
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, online news is always up-to-date while
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 fast changing world, readers tend to expect updated
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 about what has just happened or is happening around them. Online news can be broadcast immediately with vivid pictures and relevant stories, making it more appealing to readers than printed news.
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, the Internet is a repository of
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 for people to dig for
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 that they need. Digital
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 can be stored in mass quantity, which allows internet users to search for events that occurred in the past.
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, newspapers are generally hard to preserve because of the corrosive effects of the environment and their sheer bulk makes storage difficult.
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 once again confirms the edge of online news. In conclusion, I firmly believe that the Internet is even now replacing newspapers as the principal medium for accessing all the latest news.
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