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Business & cultural exchange between countries is increasing and this is thought to be a positive development by some. However, others believe that it might lead to loss of identity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the recent times, the level of ease of doing Business and accepting each other
tradition
 between many countries is increasing. According to some people it is a good sign of progress. While,
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 group of people think it may destroy once uniqueness.
This
 essay will cover both aspects of
this
 development among countries. To embark upon, the economic progress of many countries directly or indirectly depends upon doing business with other countries and
also
 at the same time exchanging cultural values. In IT industry, people work for various developed countries on different projects. Which in turn benefits them while exchanging currency. Indian IT employees work for American projects, in
return they
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return, they
 earn in dollars. Indirectly it leads to economic growth of the country. As these employees work with different countries they get to know each others cultural values and
tradition
.
For
example if
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example, if
 Indian employees celebrate Diwali there is a curiosity among western employers or colleagues to know about the
tradition
.
However
,
uniqueness
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the uniqueness
 of a country in terms of
tradition
, culture and
also
 few specialized
industries
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industry
 sector is on
stack
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the stack
. Western types of dresses imported to India for doing business
.
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.
 Many Indians are attracted towards western culture dressing which
effects
have an effect upon
affects
 the Indian traditional dressing. As we can explain, many western brands like woodland or Reebok
doing
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is doing
does
 business in
India but
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India, but
 Indian
tradition
 is to were leather
sandles
a shoe consisting of a sole fastened by straps to the foot
sandals
. It can be concu

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