The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It has been suggested that the government should control the amount of
violence
in films and on
television
in order to decrease the rate of violent crimes in society. It would certainly be easy to garner support for
such
a move, but solely
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choose and follow; as of theories, ideas, policies, strategies or plans
adopting
such
a policy will do little to effect social change. The question has often been raised as to what extent media
violence
actually influences
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. One can readily recount incidences of a child or young person viewing some violent
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
in a movie or on
television
and
then
trying to reproduce that situation in real life. It is hard to estimate the amount of
violence
which can be traced back to
television
shows or
movies but
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movies, but
the existence of
such
incidences is undeniable. Logically, removing
this
violent content should directly reduce the incidence of
such
violence but
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violence, but
this
relationship between violent media content and violent
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
is not so simple. While much has been recorded
of
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by
young people imitating media
violence
, little has been directed to the influence of sad
violence
on those who are able to differentiate the imaginary situations in movies and on
television
from reality. If one were to find no similar
relationship it
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relationship, it
could be immediately surmised that the most direct solution is increased supervision of young people, and not the modification of media content. The degree to which people are influenced by what they see in the media depends directly on how
responsibly they
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responsibly, they
are educated about the relationship of fiction and reality. Watching comedies
does not transform
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do not transform
one into a comedian, and watching violent movies does not directly make one violent. Rather than taking crude half measures to repair complex social problems, more focus must be placed on the nature of interpersonal relationships, social responsibility and personal accountability.
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