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Even though Globalization affects the world’s economics in a very positive way, its negative sides should not be forgotten. Discuss.

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Everything has tow sides in the
world
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, and so has the
prosses
a particular course of action intended to achieve a result
process
processes
praises
 of
globalization
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 too. The effects of
globalization
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on
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of
 the
world
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 economy are diverted. We must acknowledge that the negative effects are from a different kind than the positive ones.
Therfor
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Therefore
 the negative sides, like low
paiment
a sum of money paid or a claim discharged
payment
payments
 in less developed countries are important to
conciderate
showing concern for the rights and feelings of others
considerate
. If we take the Eurozone
for example
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, the economic changes according to the
gloablisation
growth to a global or worldwide scale
globalization
globalisation
 process are huge. Many companies have transferred their factories into cheaper production
earies
a particular geographical region of indefinite boundary (usually serving some special purpose or distinguished by its people or culture or geography)
areas
 to
compeat
compete for something; engage in a contest; measure oneself against others
compete
 in the
world
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markes
the world of commercial activity where goods and services are bought and sold
markets
. The results are rising unemployment rates in the “old industrial countries”. In regard to the other countries on the
world
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 market,
such
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 as China,
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 job transfer is a big opportunity. But no one can
denie
declare untrue; contradict
deny
 that the consequences for the less developed countries where
economy
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the economy
 flourished, based on availability of cheap employees are highly important:
globalization
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 based on
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this facts
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these facts
this fact
 brings
enviromantal
of or relating to the external conditions or surroundings
environmental
 problems.
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, there are
also
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posive
lacking in energy or will
passive
 reasons for
globlaistaional
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 effects. In
general it
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general, it
 is remarkable that there is a new tendency in “Thinking
Global
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Globally
”.
For instance
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, people are willing to
leran
gain knowledge or skills
learn
 more languages and get educated about
othe
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
the
 cultures. Countries
fromaly
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knowen
apprehended with certainty
known
 as undeveloped,
such
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 as India, are getting chances to be the main leader in a certain field. All in all it can be said that the effects of
globalization
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 are enormous. The
unerstanding
the cognitive condition of someone who understands
understanding
 of economic processes has changed completely. It is important to think in bigger terms, not just about the
owen
Welsh industrialist and social reformer who founded cooperative communities (1771-1858)
Owen
own
open
 country. The positive things that
this
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globalization
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 process have brought must sensible
us
put into service; make work or employ for a particular purpose or for its inherent or natural purpose
use
 for the negative sides. The all over aim should be a
world
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 in balance, but
this
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 has yet to come
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