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Most of the urgent problems can only be solved with international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#cooperation
It is true that some people believe that cross-national
cooperation
 is the only measure that can be tackled the majority of the
emergent
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emerging
 issues. While I accept that
this
 may suit many people, I believe that not all acute problems can be coped with international organizations. On the one hand, it is widely agreed that many issues have reached a global level and only through the
cooperation
 of a wide range of countries can be addressed.
Firstly
, global warming is an increasing concern for human around the world.
For example
, the famous Kyoto Protocol is the result of international
cooperation
, which has been implemented for many years in an attempt to reduce the emission of greenhouse gas.
Secondly
, our world is facing lots of terrorism, there are many murders and bombing which need worldwide support and assistance.
For instance
, multi-national
cooperation
 needs to
tackled
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tackle
 terrorist acts
from
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of
 the Islamic State (IS), which has taken the lives of many innocent people in the world.
On the other hand
, most alarming problems can solely be
coped
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coping
 with the local authorities.
First
, education, health, and poverty can only be solved by their governments.
In particular
, the global support’s aid is temporary,
therefore
 the governments have to implement
the good
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better
 policies to develop their countries, give poor
people
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person's
 chances to improve their standard of living.
Furthermore
, corruption is the urgent issues that can only be dealing with the independent development and reform of individual countries. The international organization has no authority to
inquiry
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inquire
 a country’s government, which can only be prevented by the residents and officials. In conclusion, while the cross-national organization is an effective way in dealing with many of acute problems, it seems to me that there are
also
 a large number of urgent issues that require the domestic resolution and action
instead
 of global support.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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