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Some believe that technology, such as mobile phones, cell phones are destroying social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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As the cell phone has enriched in our every corner of life, people hold the view that interpersonal communication is interrupted by is. From my perspective, I agree with
argument
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the argument
. On one hand, it cannot be denied that technologies
such
 as mobile phones
cut-off
a designated limit beyond which something cannot function or must be terminated
cutoff
 a person from the real environment who is constantly on his/her phone.
This
 interrupts him/her to have a face to face conversation with the people surrounding us which gradually decreases his/her importance in its vicinity. It is seen that, to exemplify, people like to maintain distance with a person who prefers to call them rather meeting them personally.
On the other hand
, technologies like cell phones allows us to make contact with our far away family members or friends.
This
 to say that, if any of our family
member
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members
 or our close friend has to go far away from us because of some personal reasons, the best possible way to contact them is through mobiles only as
face-to-face conversation
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a face-to-face conversation
 is not possible.
This
 is best illustrated by imagining a mother whose only son has to go abroad for studies, she will be relaxed only when she can have a talk with her son which is possible only through these technologies. In conclusion, I believe that there are both positive and negative aspects of mobile phones on social interaction.
Although
, it affects our face-to-face contacts, yet its importance in maintaining relationships with family and friends is undeniable. People should use these technologies sensibly as these were invented to make our lives comfortable.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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