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Obesity was once considered a disease of adults; however, it is becoming increasingly common among children. Why do you think this is happening? What can be done to help children stay healthy?

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Nowadays kids are very choosy about
food
. Parents always tries to provide healthy
food their children
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food to their children
. According to research, in past obesity was only common in people ages above 20 years, but now it is common in small school students. In my opinion, it is due to the lots of changes occurs in living conditions.
To spend a great
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Spend a great
 life it is very necessary to eat healthy. Nowadays, junk
food
are
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is
 easily available and people find it convenient for themselves. The consumers are now becoming habitual to have a lot of junk
stuff especially
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stuff, especially
 kids, due to which they have to suffer from lots of diseases because obesity is one of the risk
factor
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factors
 of many illnesses.
For example
, heart disease that
can occurs
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can occur
 being overweight.
Furthermore
, chips, fast
food
 and other
junk
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junk food, don't provide
junk food don't provide
junk food aren't providing
food
 not provide any energy they are only one of the factor to make oneself sick. No doubt, children got attracted towards
this
 kind of
food
 because they find it tasty.
Moreover
,
this
 unhealthy diet makes them internally weak, and another factor is, when they become
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
 they have trouble to make themselves look smart. Being overweight one can find lack of confidence and
also
 low self-esteem. It
also
 effect on physical activity because due to
this
 individual get tired soon by working long hours.
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