Some people believe that professional such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training.Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give yoyr own opinion.
Many people opine that the country which trains health professionals and engineers should bind them to work in their native areas for the betterment of their countrymen.Some folks may not agree with
this
idea and emphasize the freedom of employment in the country of their choice.Both these viewpoints have their own merits but I think that the sponsoring society deserves the most to reap the harvest.
Those favouring the jobs of skilled persons in their host states cite many advantages of Linking Words
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proposition.First of all, it helps a lot in nation-building.If there
are more doctors in a particular region, it will help in improving the Linking Words
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public health by providing better patient care.Linking Words
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, the engineers may help in developing good infrastructure Linking Words
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promoting the standard of living.Linking Words
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intellectuals for their problem-solving.Because the villagers in many resource-poor areas cannot afford to go abroad for treatment, it is a big sigh of relief, when their own doctors provide services at their doorsteps.Linking Words
Thirdly
, jobs in local areas enable the learned person to practice their skills in the same population on which they were trained.Linking Words
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, going to another state will pose major challenges to communication and language barriers.Linking Words
On the contrary
, serving in native regions would not require new linguistic skills.Fourthly, the idea of working for own community promotes a sense of patriotism and the will to bring positive reforms.
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appealing to many individuals.It helps in securing good jobs and handsome salaries.Linking Words
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, my colleagues who went to the United States after graduation are earning millions of dollars Linking Words
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those staying back in Pakistan are barely making ends meet.Linking Words
In addition
, migration to resource-rich countries helps improve their skill set as they are exposed to more advanced equipment.Linking Words
Furthermore
, shifting abroad provides an opportunity to learn about different cultural and traditional values.
To summarize, I support the idea of mandatory working of specialist doctors and engineers in a country where they were trained, for the benefit of society.Linking Words
However
, the governments should provide ample facilities to keep the genius minds motivated in their work.Linking Words
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