The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centres. It is feared that this trend can bring negative influences on the youths and the society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Our youth these days spend a lot of their
lesiure
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
time
in the shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
centre
. Some in the society
are
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is
afraid that
this
under utilization of our youth's leisure
time
has a negative influence on them and in result is detrimental to our society. I partially agree with
this
view because of my view that everything in excess acts as a poison, and
therefore
a balance must be reached. These centres are not only avenues for shopping but they are
also
a
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
for entertainment.
Therfore young
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Therefore, young
Therefore young
people these days have a huge pull towards spending
there
of them or themselves
their
time
here with the
freinds
a person you know well and regard with affection and trust
friends
and families. But the effect is that young people
today
have forgotten the value of money, and
in
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on
an
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a
spree to catch up with the latest trends advertised, they spend
huge amount
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huge amounts
a huge amount
of money on products that they
dont
do not
don't
require. Sustainability is not the goal
today
, but shopping for pleasure is and it will have very negative effects on the economy and
environment
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the environment
.
For
example items
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example, items
like mobile phones are being frequently replaced whenever a newer model comes out, but whether they need a newer phone or not is not their concern. These
has resulted
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have resulted
results
in
an
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a
massive e-waste problem.
young
(used of living things especially persons) in an early period of life or development or growth
Young
people
today
are
also
neglecting other activities
such
as reading
,
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,
painting and sports to spend more and more
time
in other entertainment activities at the shopping centres like watching frequent movies or playing arcade with
freinds
a person you know well and regard with affection and trust
friends
.
This
is affecting the personality development of our young people
today
, and they are being led away from focusing on building skills and focusing on their education that will affect them in the future. What is not
required is
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required, is
an
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a
blanket ban on young people spending
time
at the shopping
centre but
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centre, but
an awareness
campaign among
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campaign, among
them to focus on better utilising their
time
elsewhere and
ocassionally
now and then or here and there
occasionally
engage with shopping
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
activities. Shopping centres are affecting the ability of our youth to
beomce
spring back; spring away from an impact
bounce
skillfull and leading them to
overspending
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overspend
. A balance is required between spending
time
at the shopping
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
and other leisurely activities.

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