Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

Some people
suggests
Suggestion
suggest
have suggested
are suggesting
have been suggesting
that engaging
with
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in
fun
activities with the children can develop their skills and creativity
more efficiently
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more efficient
than reading.
Although
reading is long proven to be effective in developing children's skills, I agree that there are some activities that are more effective in children's development. The reasons and examples of
this
will be discussed in
this
essay. One fundamental reason on why reading is less effective is because some children are not ready and conditioned to be engaged in doing
activity
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activities
an activity
such
as reading. In simple terms, they
dont
do not
don't
have the enough mental capacity to
such
activities.
Majority
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The majority
of children are forced to read by their parents at a very young age by limiting their activities that can make them explore the world around them.
For example
, children in the Philippines are taught by their parents to read and restricting them in doing
fun
activities. The lack of exploration and abstract reasoning makes them less creative. On the other side, children at a young age is much more interested in doing activities which is more active and
fun
. To support
this
claim, recent studies
shows
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show
compelling evidences which states that children's abstract reasoning and brain activity tends to increase when exposed to the activities
such
as playing, painting, drawing,
fun
interactive learnings as well as exploring how simple objects work. In that sense, parents who let their children think on their own as well engage them in interactive learning activities are much more creative and
skillful
having or showing knowledge and skill and aptitude
skilful
than those who
dont
do not
don't
. Taking everything into account, we can
concude
decide by reasoning; draw or come to a conclusion
conclude
concede
concluded
that children who are exposed and engaged in activities which they enjoy are more effective in making the children creative and
skillful
.
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