The education you receive from your family is more important than the education you receive from school. To what extent do you agree with this statement and why?

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People said that children are educated by family is more necessary than

school

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. Some of them have a lot of different opinions. I think both

school

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and family take

responsible

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responsibility

for

rising

increasing in quantity or value

raising

their children, but it is useful for the kids to be taught by their family. I completely agree with

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statement.

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, most of children live with their parents since they was born.

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, they will easily share emotions with parents and they will have many instructions from

parents

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the parents

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, it is important for them to overcome difficult problems. Parents can make the kid are more comfortable due to they always make a word from their heart and a large number of them are people who inspire for their kids.

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education environment

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education, environment

just is a place which can help students about their life and society. There

are

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a wide range of parents do not dare to punish them when they have

mistake

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mistaken

and do not correct.

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School

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The school

will strengthen the knowledge in a new prospective

instead

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of parents.

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, there are many students in a

school

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for teacher to look after all of them so education at

school

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just fast-track problem-solving skill and analysing for them.

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, most of student are still young to aware of their attitudes. In conclusion, members of

family

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the family

a family

are people who can influence in a child development. I think parents should spend more time to educate their

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

because parents' education is more important than

school

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

246 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

financial literacy
budgeting
savings
investing
tax obligations
retirement planning
loans
credit
interest rates
crowded curricula
traditional academic subjects
real-life experiences
parental guidance
practical
intellectually rigorous
school syllabus
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The education you receive from your family is more important than the education you receive from school. To what extent do you agree with this statement and why?

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Many people believe that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. What are these problems and how they be reduced.

Write essay task 1 for the process of making carbonated drink

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

You arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: explain the important event; apologise for the situation; suggest a new arrangement.