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In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. Discuss both systems and state which one do you think is better.

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People in different countries have different view about how marriages should be arranged. While the partners that parents choose for their kids might be the suitable ones, I believe the children have the right to decide who they want to marry. On the one hand, the only
reason parents
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reason, parents
 want to interfere in
marriage
 decisions is because of their children's happiness. With the life experience they have gained through the years, they know exactly which requirements of the partner are needed in a healthy and stable
marriage
. An adult with ideal family backgrounds or a job with lots of potential promotion would be in any cases more preferable than someone who is unemployed and still rely on their parents. Parents might
also
 introduce their friends' children to their own sons and daughters because they trust that their friends would be kind to their kids as parent-in-laws.
On the other hand
, I believe marriages should be built based on love. A person might get married to somebody with excellent material conditions and without any emotional attraction to them, but no one could guarantee that it would be a precise decision. The core value of any
marriage
 is understanding and sacrifice
to
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for
 each other. Both husbands and wives need
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to try
 their best to become a better
person not
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person, not
 only for
themselves but
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themselves, but
also
 for their spouses and future children.
Therefore
, everyone should have the right to meet and fall in
love
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love, then
then
 choose the one who they think is the most suitable to be their future partner. In conclusion, while I understand the tradition of arranged
marriage
 in some countries, I am certain that the choice of spouses only belongs to the two people who directly involve in the
marriage
.
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