some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. How do you think children should spend the free time.
It is sometimes thought that children should spend more
time
at Use synonyms
school
and less Use synonyms
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thin and fit
spare
time
at their disposal. Use synonyms
This
they believe can help children Linking Words
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more which will benefit them gain knowledge or skills
learn
at
the Suggestion
in
on
longrun
. In my opinionSuggestion
long run
,
I believe that free Accept space
,
time
should be Use synonyms
use
to acquire new skills or engage in sporting activities that could benefit them and the society rather than on Suggestion
used
school
work.
Use synonyms
Firstly
, Linking Words
school
work Use synonyms
are
important and should be done within the Suggestion
is
school
hours. Free Use synonyms
time
can be used for other activities that could help increase the children's Use synonyms
productivity
Accept comma addition
productivity, such
such
as, learning a new Linking Words
skills
. Through Suggestion
skill
this
, children are able to learn something different that can be of value to them and perhaps the society in the Linking Words
longrun
. Suggestion
long run
For instance
a survey in the entertainment industry revealed that, 90% of musicians today learnt the act of singing during their childhood. Linking Words
Linking Words
this
skills turned out to be their career in the end.
Suggestion
This
Another
activities to consider during Suggestion
Other
spar
thin and fit
spare
time
Use synonyms
is engaging
in sports. By so doing, children are able to have fun and bond with their peers. Suggestion
is engaged
This
helps to build their Linking Words
inter-personal
relationship skills and occurring among or involving several people
interpersonal
also
improve their health. Linking Words
For example
, children involved in sporting activities are less prone to obesity and Linking Words
are able
Suggestion
have able also influenced
are able also influence
also
influence the way the parents live. Parents can encourage their children by keeping fit and staying healthy.
In conclusion, Linking Words
freetime
should be used for productive activities that enhance the lives of children rather than just Suggestion
Freetime
freedom
school
work. Use synonyms
children
Suggestion
Children
should be encourage
to take up activities at Suggestion
should be encouraged
should encourage
spar
thin and fit
spare
time
that are beneficial to them and the society at large.Use synonyms
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite