some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. How do you think children should spend the free time.
It is sometimes thought that children should spend more
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Thisthey believe can help children
learmore which will benefit them
gain knowledge or skills
longrun. In my opinion
,I believe that free
useto acquire new skills or engage in sporting activities that could benefit them and the society rather than on
areimportant and should be done within the
timecan be used for other activities that could help increase the children's
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suchas, learning a new
this, children are able to learn something different that can be of value to them and perhaps the society in the
For instancea survey in the entertainment industry revealed that, 90% of musicians today learnt the act of singing during their childhood.
thisskills turned out to be their career in the end.
Anotheractivities to consider during
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is engagingin sports. By so doing, children are able to have fun and bond with their peers.
Thishelps to build their
inter-personalrelationship skills and
occurring among or involving several people
alsoimprove their health.
For example, children involved in sporting activities are less prone to obesity and
have able also influenced
are able also influence
alsoinfluence the way the parents live. Parents can encourage their children by keeping fit and staying healthy. In conclusion,
freetimeshould be used for productive activities that enhance the lives of children rather than just
should be encourageto take up activities at
should be encouraged
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timethat are beneficial to them and the society at large.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- in additional
- for example
- for instance
- even though