International tourism has become a huge industry in the world. Are the problems that international travelers cause greater than the advantages they bring? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own Knowledge or experience.

The past 50 years have seen a dramatic increase in international
tourism
globally. Despite the undeniable economic prosperity it has brought to many
host
countries
, I intend to argue that the
overall
impact of international holiday-making has in fact been negative. The reasons for
this
are as follows. First of all, it is an undeniable fact that international holiday-making promotes many negative aspects of Western culture in
host
countries
. Since it is only the affluent people in developing
countries
who can afford to travel abroad, undeveloped nations like Thailand and Indonesia have become the playground of tourists from other
countries
.
As a result
, the influx of tourists from Western nations has brought with it problems
such
as drug abuse, alcoholism and prostitution. So, if governments wish to be less vulnerable, greater regulation of international
tourism
is required.
Secondly
and even more importantly, though, is the environmental degradation that international
tourism
has brought to many
host
countries
.
Although
international
tourism
has been accompanied by new employment opportunities and economic growth in many
host
nations
consequently
, it has caused significant damage to the environment and all of the ecosystem in it. A salient example of
this
is Maldives Island where countless divers, boats and ships have disrupted the marine ecosystem of the Atlas Ocean, causing significant damage to the marinal creatures. By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that the drawbacks of international
tourism
far outweigh its benefits.
Nonetheless
, I believe that launching educational campaigns in tourist resorts and hotels could diminish
such
harm considerably
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