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With the pressures on today’s young people to succeed academically, some people believe that nonacademic subjects at school (eg: physical education and cookery) should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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In
21st century
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the 21st century
, nuclear
power
 plays a very important role on earth in providing efficient, cheap and clean
energy
.
On the other hand
, nuclear weapons are the major factor in maintaining the world peace. I strongly agree that the benefits of nuclear
power
 are far greater than the disadvantages, if only safely used. The discovery of nuclear
energy
 in
20th century
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the 20th century
 changed the way the humans lived ever after. At the same time, subsequent invention nuclear weapons
also
 posed a
greatest
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greater
 threat to the existence of humanity. There are
handful
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a handful
 of countries that
poses
have as an attribute, knowledge, or skill
possess
posses
pushes
 the nuclear weapons technology, because of which the scare of use them in conflicts has been haunting humans forever. There were some high profile accidents in nuclear
power
 plants in the recent past, like in Chernobyl, Russia and Fukushima, Japan. These disasters are posing as a grave reminder
to
Suggestion
of
 the humanity on the destructive
power
 of nuclear
energy
.
However
, since the technology is rapidly evolving, harnessing of a nuclear
energy
 is turning out to be safer than ever before. Earth is running out of natural resources, humans are extracting the fossil fuels in huge amounts like never before to
power
 the people’s life.
This
 can’t continue forever, ultimately destruction of earth leads to destruction of humans. Nuclear
power
 is one
such
 technology if safely used, it can help humans to preserve the earth
to
Suggestion
for
 the
next
 generation by supplying clean, reliable and cheap
energy
. To conclude, I agree that advantages of nuclear
power
 out number the disadvantages. Nuclear
energy
 is like a double-edged sword, it can be used for both good and bad. Only by people’s collective effort, the benefits can be harnessed to the maximum extent.
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