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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problem as a result of eating to much fast food. It is neccesary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Goverment
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Government
shoul
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
 levy a tariff
of
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on
 fast
food
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 because in some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from
health problem
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health problems
a health problem
.
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Firstly
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Firstly, this
this
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 essay will discuss how higher tax would raise prices for
this
Linking Words
food
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. In a lot of countries
,
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,
especially in western countries fast
food
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 is the popular
food
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. They buy
this
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food
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 for their breakfast, their lunch and even their dinner. About the workers are too busy
in
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with
 a day, they spend 7-8 hours to go to work in the office so they don't have time to cook their meal. The
besr
(superlative of 'good') having the most positive qualities
best
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is buy
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is to buy
buys
 fast
food
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, it's
convinient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
 and don't waste
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 much time. Many fast
food
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restaurant
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restaurants
 near their office and suitable for the money so they just only take a few minutes to have a lunch. Or maybe if they are lazy cause they don't want to cook for the dinner
thay
people in general
they
that
 can
also
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 buy
this
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food
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.
This
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 problem
lead
Suggestion
leads
 to the consequences that they'll suffer from
desease
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
diseases
,... We need to solve
this
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 problem by levy a tariff on fast
food
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