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Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion

#people #schools #students #abilities
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Quality of education provided by schools plays vital role in shaping up a person’s life. Some people suppose educational institutions select students on the basis of their academic merits. While, another set of people thinks, it should be done by looking into various unique talents. In my opinion, I believe students have often discovers their hidden
talent
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 by interacting different types of people with different qualities. On the one hand, the great talents born often come with the cut throat competition among the other brightest student. It is better to offer admission to on best
academics
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academic
scores students
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scores, students
 it makes them more competitive and
sportive
furnishing support or assistance
supportive
 nature to work
more harder
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harder
more hard
.
one
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One
 of the
example
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examples
 is, Scientist do research and do various experiments, by any chance, even it got fail again they will try
to be succeed
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to succeed
.
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, one cannot deny that unique
talent
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 is a hidden
talent
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 which is often discovered randomly. Studying with different qualities of students will get to know once hidden
talent
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 and by working on that hidden
talent
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 can be more successful in life.
Such
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 as
cricketer
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a cricketer
 from
India Sachin
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India, Sachin
 Tendulkar get to know his ability to bat by the help of
this
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 school
friends
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friend
. To conclude, I firmly believe, many people are not blessed with the
academics
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academic
knowledge but
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knowledge, but
 getting into the school of which got various talents discovers themselves and there are set of students gives them the opportunity to
show case
a setting in which something can be displayed to best effect
showcase
 their academic and competitive qualities by getting enrolled on those kind of institutions.
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