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If we want to save the future of the planet, we will have to drastically change our way of life

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These days, every time you turn on the television or flick through the pages of a newspaper, you will witness there is a significant increase in the amount of environmental issue which is posing a serious threat to the earth. It is believed that human partly responsible for these problems.
Nonetheless
, we
also
 can preserve the planet if we know how to change our lifestyle in most effective measures. I completely agree with
this
 idea and in
this
 essay I will support my view with examples.
Firstly
, the environment of
planet
Suggestion
the planet
 has been devastated seriously. It may originate in result of small harm activities
such
 as using plastic bags or releasing CO2 which mainly cause global warming. In fact, many people do not care about the greenhouse effect, they believe that nothing will happen if they turn
air
 conditioner which releasing a large amount of CO2. We can use
electric fan
Suggestion
electric fans
an electric fan
 rather than using
air conditioner
Suggestion
the air conditioner
an air conditioner
, choose recycle products. Personally, I think we should raise public awareness in order to protect the earth from waste. Another reason why I support
this
 opinion is that we can use renewable energy from solar, wind or water power so as to limit emissions from factories and individuals. Green resource will decrease the
air
 pollution from fossil energy
such
 as petroleum, coal and natural gas.
In addition
, green trees can absorb kinds of
air
 pollution. So, government should encourage people
plant
Suggestion
to plant
 more trees to reduce
air
 pollution. To sum up,
although
 there is no doubt that our environment may reflect our
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
, we need to raise public awareness, take
place
Suggestion
the place
 of the fossil energy and grow more trees. I believe small activities could be implemented to save the earth.@ mailnaycuachi
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