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Some people think that school uniforms are unnecessary and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The argument of whether or not wearing a
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uniform
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 is mandatory is often debated.
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 some hold the opinion that
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 thinking should be stopped,
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 agree to some extent that it should not be obligatory. Many believe
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 attire is important because it provides a sense of identity. By wearing it, students proudly represent their
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, as the
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 logo and colours are presented through their
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clothing
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 colour scheme.
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 to
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, they
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 think that the
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 ensures the safety of the student.
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, in 2015, Khartoum Times reported a story of
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school
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 girl who was lost on a
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 trip to the local zoo, she was
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indentified
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identified
 by nearby locals because they recognized her shirt logo and safely returned her to her family. Undoubtedly, the common educational institutions suit has its perks.
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, forcing
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children
 to dress a certain way inhibits
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. Which is a key aspect of childhood that later shapes personalities and views.
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 is because people express themselves through their
appearence
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appearance
 from a young age. Pressuring fresh minds into dressing like soldiers can create a robotic sort of approach to life, possibly making them unhappy in the future.
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, a 2019 Psychology study on freedom of speech and expression assessed and compared individuals
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 were forced to wear a
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 as kids and those
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 were allowed to dress how they
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. The results found that those who had freedom of choice were much more confident in their decisions.
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 they were only young at the time, giving kids the option greatly impacted their characters. In conclusion, despite the many arguments put forth about children being forced to wear a
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uniform
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,
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 believe individuality prevails over
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 identity and children should be free to express themselves.
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task response
For task response, make sure to clearly state your position on the topic and provide a balanced view on both sides of the argument. Also, ensure that all parts of the prompt are fully addressed in your response.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, work on organizing your ideas into clear paragraphs with topic sentences and supporting details. Use appropriate linking words and transition signals to show the relationships between your ideas and create a logical flow.
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