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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead?

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Immigration
 has a significant impact on the contemporary society. Each year, more and more people from all over the world decide to leave their home countries and move to another place.
This
 essay will examine the reasons and the consequences of
immigration
. In my view, the main reason of
immigration
 is a strong desire of better life quality and safe future. A lot of people from so-called
Third
 World move to developed countries in search of better employment opportunities, and
therefore
, higher incomes.
Moreover
, living in a wealthy country implies living in a country with
stable economy
Suggestion
a stable economy
, so risks of losing their savings
also
 lessen.
For example
, labour migration from Mexico to the USA is caused by these facts. Other reasons that force whole families to cross borders are wars and various cultural conflicts in their homeland. Many people migrate, seeking security and safe future for their children.
For instance
, most of the refugees who arrived in the European Union were escaping from wars.
However
, sometimes
immigration
 causes more problems than it solves, resulting in negative consequences for both immigrants and their countries of destination.
First
 of all, most of the refugees can’t find jobs because of the lack of language skills and difficulties in adaptation. That’s why the countries have to run various refugee assistance programs to help those people. But
disproportionate burden
Suggestion
the disproportionate burden
 of maintaining the immigrants leads to tension in the society.
Secondly
, not all of the refugees receive proper asylum, food and medical care. So they are at risk even after crossing the border.
Finally
, even highly qualified specialists, who seek better employment, often don’t get what they are looking for. In conclusion, I think that people immigrate to have better life prospects.
However
, life after
immigration
 may not always meet people’s expectations. So it’s very important to consider all the possible outcomes and decide whether
leaving
Suggestion
to leave
 your homeland is worth it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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