Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays many
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Nowadays, many
parents often wonder if they should allow their children to stay at
home
until they are old enough to study at primary
school
or let them go to
school
as soon as impossible
.
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Whereas, I would argue that sending children to educate council as early is the best choice. On the one hand, the children who allowed to stay at
home
have a big amount of time to gain physical development. The reason can be put forward to explain
this
phenomenon that they don’t have to catch up with the lectures at the educate agency as well as be anxious due to continuous assessment or exams. In Finland which has been known as the best academic education country, the inhabitants are famous for maxims
such
as “ Let the children be themselves” or “ The children’s business is playing and playing”.
Moreover
, if the student are not
be
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being
obliged to go to
school
early, they can learn a lot in the
school
of hard knocks or improve society skills
such
as communicate skill which schools never teach them.
On the other hand
, it seems to me that letting the children attend to
school
early is essential.
First
, they decrease the over-dependence on their parents because their parents are not able to be with them high and low to look after them, they have to prepare almost things they need
such
as books or breakfast.
Secondly
,
such
children can have the capability of having a good grasp of curriculum and pass the formal examination easily than others who stayed at
home
for ages, since these students have been exposed to studying for a long time which creates a good studying
habit
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habits
. In conclusion, while allowing the children to stay at
home
does have some benefits, it seems to me that the advantages of
a
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an
early education for children is a better choice.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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