A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter - explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday - describe some possible disadvantages - say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

Dear Anne, I am so happy to hear from you! It has been a long time since we’ve seen each other. I hope everything is well with you and your family. Regarding the camping
holiday
that you were asking about, first of all, I am very
much
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excited to hear that you
finally
decided to try
this
activity. I thought that you
will
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actually enjoy a camping
holiday
since I know you enjoy the outdoors. I heard that you plan to do
this
at Lake Moniba. I camped there before and I loved it! You will very much enjoy the natural scenery there and it is
also
a peaceful place to do your yoga.
However
, I highly recommend
to bring
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insect repellent lotion as some parts
in
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the area are infested by mosquitoes. I
also
heard in the news that the west side of the area is being visited by large bears so better avoid going there. I would love to join you on
this
camping
holiday
but my schedule will not allow me to do so. Since it is in the summer, I am occupied
to accompany
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my two kids with a series of workshops. It is possible that I will
available
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next summer though. You can always message me if you have plans
of going
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for
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another camping
holiday
during that time. If you have other questions, please feel free to drop me a message or
to
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give me a call. Sincerely yours, Jinky
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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a single clear idea to enhance readability.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter has a warm and friendly greeting and closing, which is appropriate for a letter to a friend.
Task Achievement
The response thoroughly covers all parts of the task, providing both advantages and disadvantages of the camping trip and expressing a desire to join in the future.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is very friendly and suitable for a personal letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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