A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter - explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday - describe some possible disadvantages - say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
Dear Anne,
I am so happy to hear from you! It has been a long time since we’ve seen each other. I hope everything is well with you and your family.
Regarding the camping
holiday
that you were asking about, first of all, I am very much
excited to hear that you Fix the agreement mistake
apply
finally
decided to try this
activity. I thought that you will
actually enjoy a camping Wrong verb form
would
holiday
since I know you enjoy the outdoors. I heard that you plan to do this
at Lake Moniba. I camped there before and I loved it! You will very much enjoy the natural scenery there and it is also
a peaceful place to do your yoga. However
, I highly recommend to bring
insect repellent lotion as some parts Change the verb form
bringing
in
the area are infested by mosquitoes. I Change preposition
of
also
heard in the news that the west side of the area is being visited by large bears so better avoid going there.
I would love to join you on this
camping holiday
but my schedule will not allow me to do so. Since it is in the summer, I am occupied to accompany
my two kids with a series of workshops. It is possible that I will Change preposition
with accompanying
available
next summer though. You can always message me if you have plans Add a missing verb
be available
of going
Change preposition
to go
for
another camping Change preposition
on
holiday
during that time.
If you have other questions, please feel free to drop me a message or to
give me a call.
Sincerely yours,
JinkyFix the infinitive
apply
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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a single clear idea to enhance readability.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter has a warm and friendly greeting and closing, which is appropriate for a letter to a friend.
Task Achievement
The response thoroughly covers all parts of the task, providing both advantages and disadvantages of the camping trip and expressing a desire to join in the future.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is very friendly and suitable for a personal letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite