Do you agree that the advantages cars bring outweigh the disadvantages?

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Although

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it is sometimes people said that

car

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advantages is

outweight

impart skills or knowledge to

taught

tight

than negative impacts. In my view

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refers to the speaker or writer

will sit on the fence of

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statement. There are several

excuse

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excuses

for

this

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statement.

First

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of all

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with the presence of the cars

it is

it's

just not for travelling which can not give us the luck

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but the

car

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was

also

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help

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helping

people

succes

an event that accomplishes its intended purpose

success

sources

certain business

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certain businesses

. Be more specific, for the society who have a business in

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transportation sector

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the transportation sector

. Taking a

rent

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car

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car, for

for example

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this

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era

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of course not at all society having a

car

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for travelling to somewhere and of course the

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rent

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rental

car

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was being the

second

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alternative to

travelling

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travel

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many inhabitants will come to the

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rent

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rental

car

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for

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rent some

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rent, some

vehicles there

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automatically the income will increase

everyday

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every day

. On the other hands

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having a

car

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was

also

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has

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having

the negative sides.

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this

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era

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pollutions is not

surprised

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surprising

for society anymore. According to the data in one of the websites

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one of the

factor

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factors

that made the air became bad is the vehicles, especially for the four-

wheels

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wheel

vehicles

such

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cars

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car

. Taking the Jakarta

for example

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the number of the cars was not controlled.

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the air condition is

extremly

to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect

extremely

dangerous for the citizens who breathing there. In conclusion

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trully

in accordance with truth or fact or reality

truly

believe that having two sides

that is

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the positive impact and the negative effect to every single

perspection

the act of persecuting (especially on the basis of race or religion)

persecution

in our life. [15:45, 9/4/2019] Ielts Septi:

Nowadays many

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Nowadays, many

people have a

car

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because there are some benefits of it and I totally agree with

this

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statement,

such

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a person who has a

car

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is able to save

money

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and earn

money

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from it albeit it will increase the number of congestion in a country. In

this

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era,

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car

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the car

crussial

of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis

crucial

thing which many people have it since it can

aid

make an addition (to); join or combine or unite with others; increase the quality, quantity, size or scope of

add

them for saving

money

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: in my country, If a family has

arounf

in the area or vicinity

around

3-5

members and

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members, and

they want to go somewhere, they will use a

car

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because

it is

it's

more economical than use public

transportation

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or motorcycle.

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this

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vehicle can make people to earn

money

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by renting it, or doing

transportation

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online like grab or

gojek

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which seems

loke

prefer or wish to do something

new job is available for common people.

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, the drawback if every family has a

car

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, it will rise the percentage of traffic jam because the road will not

sufficient

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suffice

to accommodate all of

cars

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the cars

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: in Jakarta, a lot of families have a

car

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Furthermore

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, the way still in same size and it is not enough to for all vehicles.

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, Jakarta is

rank

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ranked

12 in the world as city of congestion. Despite

car

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will make congestion grow up in a country, I believe that

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car

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cars

can lead more advantages

such

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as citizen can deposit due to

car

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more economical to use for many passengers and they are able to earn some

money

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because it will a job for people who is using it for

rent

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or online

transportation

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

520 words

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Do you agree that the advantages cars bring outweigh the disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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