Do you agree that the advantages cars bring outweigh the disadvantages?

Although
it is sometimes people said that
car
advantages is
outweight
impart skills or knowledge to
taught
tight
than negative impacts. In my view
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will sit on the fence of
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statement. There are several
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excuses
for
this
statement.
First
of all
,
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,
with the presence of the cars
it
it is
it's
just not for travelling which can not give us the luck
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but the
car
was
also
help
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helping
people
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success
sources
in
certain business
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certain businesses
. Be more specific, for the society who have a business in
transportation sector
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the transportation sector
. Taking a
rent
car
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car, for
for example
,
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,
in
this
era
,
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,
of course not at all society having a
car
for travelling to somewhere and of course the
rent
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rental
car
was being the
second
alternative to
travelling
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travel
.
As a result
,
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,
many inhabitants will come to the
rent
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rental
car
for
rent some
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rent, some
vehicles there
,
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,
automatically the income will increase
everyday
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every day
. On the other hands
,
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having a
car
was
also
has
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having
the negative sides.
Moreover
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in
this
era
,
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,
pollutions is not
surprised
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surprising
for society anymore. According to the data in one of the websites
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,
one of the
factor
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factors
that made the air became bad is the vehicles, especially for the four-
wheels
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wheel
vehicles
such
a
cars
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car
. Taking the Jakarta
for example
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,
the number of the cars was not controlled.
Finally
,
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,
the air condition is
extremly
to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect
extremely
dangerous for the citizens who breathing there. In conclusion
,
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,
I
trully
in accordance with truth or fact or reality
truly
believe that having two sides
that is
the positive impact and the negative effect to every single
perspection
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Nowadays many
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Nowadays, many
people have a
car
because there are some benefits of it and I totally agree with
this
statement,
such
as
:
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:
a person who has a
car
is able to save
money
and earn
money
from it albeit it will increase the number of congestion in a country. In
this
era,
car
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the car
is
crussial
of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis
crucial
thing which many people have it since it can
aid
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add
them for saving
money
.
For instance
: in my country, If a family has
arounf
in the area or vicinity
around
3-5
members and
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members, and
they want to go somewhere, they will use a
car
because
it
it is
it's
more economical than use public
transportation
or motorcycle.
Moreover
,
this
vehicle can make people to earn
money
by renting it, or doing
transportation
online like grab or
gojek
which seems
loke
prefer or wish to do something
like
new job is available for common people.
On the other hand
, the drawback if every family has a
car
, it will rise the percentage of traffic jam because the road will not
sufficient
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suffice
to accommodate all of
cars
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the cars
.
For example
: in Jakarta, a lot of families have a
car
.
Furthermore
, the way still in same size and it is not enough to for all vehicles.
As a result
, Jakarta is
rank
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ranked
12 in the world as city of congestion. Despite
car
will make congestion grow up in a country, I believe that
car
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cars
can lead more advantages
such
as citizen can deposit due to
car
more economical to use for many passengers and they are able to earn some
money
because it will a job for people who is using it for
rent
or online
transportation
.
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