In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior? What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Alma mater is the ultimate nourishing aid for the children, where students not only
study but
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study, but
also
learn other things like getting social,
extracurrical
outside the regular academic curriculum
extracurricular
activities, games. Sometimes, it has been seen that students
doesn't show
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don't show
good
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
which is not specific to India but to many other countries as well. The essay will discuss the key reasons and solutions according to my opinion in greater detail To start with, the prime cause of
this
issue is
flaws
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flawed
in parenting. Many children
feels
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feel
distress as their environment at home is disturbed, resulting in showcase of bad
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
in school. It has been seen that
prime casting
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the prime casting
of attitude towards life comes from parents. It is primarily them who should set up life based examples for their children to grab.
In addition
, it can be seen that
company
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the company
of the students does matter a lot. Based on the kind of company a student is in,
habbits
an established custom
habits
with respect to eating, sleeping, drinking gets
change
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changed
which in turn
lead
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leads
to change in tolerance, patience levels. In case of bad company, it can get adversely affected which is high in number. In order to address the problem, it is important for parents to maintain a healthy environment at home and try to be
friend
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a friend
friends
to their children. It will not only help in improving the surroundings with more positive
energy but
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energy, but
also
will help in improving the
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
of the child.
Also
, it will make the bond of
parent child
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parent, child
more stronger To continue with, schools
has
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have
to bring strict rules which might be against the human
rights but
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rights, but
a sense of fear should be there.
For example
, violation of any code of conduct may cause punishment,
may be
by chance
maybe
a physical punishment.
Such
things are harsh to the
students but these
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students, but these
steps will make them follow the guidelines forcefully without any misconduct. All in all, poor student
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
is a serious
issues
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issue
which can be corrected by collaboration of parents and schools.

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