You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level

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Dear sir / madam, My name is Liya and writing

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letter to express my interest and enquire about your one-week walking

tour

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package in the mountain. I received a brochure for a trip to the mountains .So, would like to collect some information regarding your trip. I am very excited about different types of risky or dangerous games that you will arrange for getting more enjoyment like mountain climbing, paragliding, skydiving etc.

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last

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year I skipped a

tour

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that was

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included different

verities

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of games, so I need to enjoy these holidays very well . I would

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appreciate

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you could provide some details regarding the

tour

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arrangement like

price

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the price

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of the

tour

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, place , mode of travel , food and accommodation , and especially about the dates because I need to submit

leave

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application in my office . I would

also

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like to express my concerns about my health condition, because

last

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month I faced a breathing problem

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because of dust allergy, so I need to know that place selected is suitable for me. I look forward

for

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your

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and my decision will

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accordance

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with your response. Yours faithfully Liya

Submitted by Liya on Wed Apr 10 2019

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

201 words

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