Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is commonly stated that richer nations ought to accept more asylum seekers and assist them with food and shelter, which are fundamental needs for humans.
This
essay strongly disagrees with
this
view because refugees often face difficulties with communication, which leads them to unemployment and countries should solve the problems of their own citizens
first
. A growing number of people hold the view that refugees often face language barriers as their main issue when arriving in a new
country
.
That is
to say, they are unable to communicate well with the locals and
consequently
, many of them struggle to find a job.
For example
, many Syrian refugees, who were granted their refugee visa in 2014 in Australia,
were
we are
we're
unable to find a job. To make matters worse, some of them opted to commit crimes,
such
as robberies and theft, in order to survive in the
country
. Clearly, bringing them to wealthy countries is not an ideal long-term solution for the
country
or the refugees. Another reason why
first
-world countries should reconsider helping refugees is that it is a common view even in Australia, Canada, or the UK, that homelessness is everywhere. It is argued that the government should assist their own people
first
before assisting other people from other countries.
For instance
, The Guardian reported that there are some Australian citizens who have been living in the streets for at least five years and they have never received any assistance from the state.
Thus
, I believe that it is important for a
country
to take care of its own citizens
first
. In conclusion,
this
essay has argued that developed nations should not take more refugees because they often have communication issues, resulting in unemployment, and there are local homeless people who should be prioritised
first
to receive assistance.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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