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In many countries, children are engaged in different kinds of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as a valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion?

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Children, nowadays, can be seen earning by doing various jobs in a large number of countries.
Although
 some people think it is positive as children become responsible and gain experience, I,
alongwith
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along with
 others, believe that it is totally unacceptable as children would not be able to enjoy their
childhood
 days and may feel over-burdened all the time. In
this
 essay, I will discuss why it is necessary to stop child labour. By doing paid work children can gain experience that may aid them to become more responsible and easy learners.
This
, in turn, would assist them to do their tasks with higher efficiency. In India,
for instance
, children who do jobs along with their studies, generally, perform better in their academics.
In addition
, If children started working earlier in their lives, they can save money for their future.
As a result
, they would be less dependant on others for their own needs of money. I
,
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,
however
, side with those, who believe that it is totally wrong to indulge children in jobs at
such
 early stages of their life. It will not only steal their enjoyment of
childhood
days but
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days, but
 would
also
 make them feel over-pressurised due to their job responsibilities.
This
 may
further
 result in
feeling
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feelings
a feeling
 of isolation amongst them.
Consequently
, children would miss the fun that all of them deserve to have during their
childhood
 days. To conclude, while some people consider children who starts working earlier in their lives as good learners and more responsible, I believe that allowing children work so early steals their enjoyment of
childhood
 and make them feel over-burdened.
Therefore
, making children work so early, is not recommended.
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