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The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Line graph
illustrate
Change the verb form
illustrates
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about
Change preposition
apply
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the
percentage
 of
people
 over 4 years old in
United
Correct article usage
the United
show examples
 Kingdom who watch
radio
 or
television
 shows in a single
day
.
Overall
,
people
 in
United
Correct article usage
the United
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 Kingdom prefer to watch
television
 in spite of a
radio
 show
along
Change preposition
throughout
show examples
 the
day
. Even though
people
 start the
day
 listening to
radio
 shows,
television
 viewers gradually
overtakes
Change the verb form
overtake
show examples
 the
percentage
 of
people
watch
Correct pronoun usage
who watch
show examples
 a
radio
 show. Notably, the range of
people
 who watch
radio
show
Fix the agreement mistake
shows
show examples
 at the start of the period is about 10%, which sees a high of just under 30% at 8:00 am. There is a constant decrease in the
percentage
 of audiences for
radio
 shows to almost above 0% till 2:00, the range remains constant till the end of the period.
Television
 audiences start at a range of 0% in the morning at 6:00 am, which sees a steep increase in viewership to just about 50% in between noon and midnight.
However
, there is a sharp decrease in the
percentage
 of audiences to considerably lower than 10%,
thereafter
 depicting a similar trend as the radios till the
next
day
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people, radio, television, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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