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People attend college or university for many defferent reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? You should write at least 250 words. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. You should give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience.

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University
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 or college is the main source of the
knowledge
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 and education.
In
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By
 past
university
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 or even schools are attended only by children of rich and noble people. But now everyone can get education regardless of their wealth or social status. Unlike schools most of universities or colleges
doesn’t have
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don’t have
 age restriction which means everyone can
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
. Everyone has their own reason for attending
university
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. The
first
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 and main reason is education. Most of the
student
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students
 attend
university
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 to increase their
knowledge
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 in some particular field. The high school graduates
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 to gain
knowledge
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 about the
career
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 that they
pursue
introduce
pose
 for some of them
this
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 could be
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last chance
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the last chance
 to study and some adult people who has job attend to increase their
knowledge
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 about their work to get
career
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 growth and etc.
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Also while
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Also, while
 studying
main course
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a main course
the main course
 in
university
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 students can learn about
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 subject related to their course and they can interact with their classmates.
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Secondly some
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Secondly, some
 people
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
enrolled
 to get new experience and start
new
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a new career
career
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 or change their current job. They might not like their current job and they want to study new more interesting for them field. Attending
university
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teach
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teaches
 students to live and make a decision on their own. In conclusion
university
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 and
college
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colleges
 offer not only
career
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 but
also
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 the opportunity to have
new experience
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new experiences
a new experience
 and learn all kinds of things. I think these are the main reasons for attending universities.
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