In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Food
is one of
most crucial requirement
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the most crucial requirement
for human beings. Too much intake of
junk
food
results in various
health
issues in humans. I completely accord that fast
food
should be taken as a taxable item as it spreads
lot
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lots
of diseases, if consumed excessively. To embark on, in the past era, there was only one source of income from the male member of the family, so women were used to prepare meals and thought it as the core responsibility of herself, which in turn help other family members to enjoy home made
food
.
In addition
, there was a good rate of healthy people.
However
, due to
dual earnings
Suggestion
the dual earnings
of both men and women these days, the concept of preparing meals at home has been cut off up-to
large extent
Suggestion
a large extent
due to the busy schedule
.
Accept space
.
It has been observed that people prefer to have fast
food
rather than cultural
food
as it is easily available and does not require much
efforts
Suggestion
effort
and cost. These
individual
Suggestion
individuals
are not aware that
this
has an adverse effect on their
health
,
hence
if more tax could be
apply
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applied
by
Government
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the Government
,
this
junk
food
can be avoided effectively.
This
, in
turn will
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turn, will
make the nation and people healthy and wealthy.
Furthermore
, we are the teachers or followers for the upcoming generation,
as a result
, if we ourselves become
health
conscious, it would help
next generation
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the next generation
to be the same. People might opt for
junk
food
once in a blue moon for a change, but should not
make
engage in
do
it as a routine, as it impacts their
health
badly by causing
lot
Suggestion
a lot
of diseases
such
as obesity,
food
poisoning and reduces immunity of an individual. To conclude, there is a need of raising awareness amongst people about the demerits of
junk
food
and applying more tax on
such
food
items to make our citizens healthy.

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