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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Despite
health
insurance
 companies are extensively working to deliver quality services for individuals and corporate but they are all should be supervised and managed by the government. Because it is essential
to
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for
 each individual to have to right for proper treatment regardless of his employment and financial aspects. While many workers have their
health
insurance
 provided by their
companies there
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companies, there
 are still many individuals who are switching jobs or even careers. Because the majority of the people depend on their companies’
insurances
 other people who are in the process of searching for a job or switching careers wouldn’t have any medical
insurance
. No one will ever know when and how he might get sick so, it is not fair for them not to have
insurance
in
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during
this
 period of time.
However
, there are many individuals who are self-employed or not working at all, in that case, they wouldn’t have any kind of medical
insurances
.
Although
 some individuals aware of the importance of it and might buy
individuals
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individual
individuals'
 plans from
insurances
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insurance
companies but
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companies, but
 many others aren’t
initially
 aware of it. Not only they don’t have the
awareness but
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awareness, but
also
 they most probably don’t have the financial luxury to buy one. Without
further
 ado. I totally support the idea of each country should provide free
health
insurances
 plans for their citizens. And it must include all the latest medical treatment. It is inevitable to have
insurance
 because of the employment state and financial level of each individual. Which delivers a high living standard for the country utilizes free
health
 service.
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