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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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insurance
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 companies are extensively working to deliver quality services for individuals and corporate but they are all should be supervised and managed by the government. Because it is essential
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for
 each individual to have to right for proper treatment regardless of his employment and financial aspects. While many workers have their
health
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insurance
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 provided by their
companies there
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companies, there
 are still many individuals who are switching jobs or even careers. Because the majority of the people depend on their companies’
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 other people who are in the process of searching for a job or switching careers wouldn’t have any medical
insurance
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. No one will ever know when and how he might get sick so, it is not fair for them not to have
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during
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 period of time.
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, there are many individuals who are self-employed or not working at all, in that case, they wouldn’t have any kind of medical
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.
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 some individuals aware of the importance of it and might buy
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individual
individuals'
 plans from
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insurance
companies but
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companies, but
 many others aren’t
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 aware of it. Not only they don’t have the
awareness but
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awareness, but
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 they most probably don’t have the financial luxury to buy one. Without
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 ado. I totally support the idea of each country should provide free
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insurances
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 plans for their citizens. And it must include all the latest medical treatment. It is inevitable to have
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 because of the employment state and financial level of each individual. Which delivers a high living standard for the country utilizes free
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 service.
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