You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taugh to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. You should write at least 250 words

There is an opinion among some group of
people which
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people, which
states that children should be more competitive while group opposite to them thinks co-operation could help children to be more successful in their future. They both have their own reasons for that and in
essay I will focus on each of
these view
these views
this view
. Competition will encourage children to be better
anything that they compete.
encouragement will help the
adult life.
example they
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example, they
will be competitive at work and gain
more higher post
a higher post
higher post
than their coworkers. Co-operation helps children to be more sociable.
Morever in
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Moreover, in
Moreover in
as football co-operation is crucial. Co-operation teaches the children to help each other. In comparison the children who taught to compete are more self-
being or placed in the center
and independent while children who learn to be part of
a community
the community
are more emphatic and dependent on
the community
In conclusion both
In conclusion, both
views have their own good and bad sides and I think they both should be encouraged
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