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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taugh to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. You should write at least 250 words

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There is an opinion among some group of
people which
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people, which
 states that children should be more competitive while group opposite to them thinks co-operation could help children to be more successful in their future. They both have their own reasons for that and in
this
 essay I will focus on each of
these view
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these views
this view
. Competition will encourage children to be better
on
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at
 anything that they compete.
This
 encouragement will help the
childrens
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child's
children
children's
 adult life.
For
example they
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example, they
 will be competitive at work and gain
more higher post
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a higher post
higher post
 than their coworkers. Co-operation helps children to be more sociable.
Morever in
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Moreover, in
Moreover in
 sport
such
 as football co-operation is crucial. Co-operation teaches the children to help each other. In comparison the children who taught to compete are more self-
centered
being or placed in the center
centred
 and independent while children who learn to be part of
community
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a community
the community
 are more emphatic and dependent on
community
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the community
.
In conclusion both
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In conclusion, both
 views have their own good and bad sides and I think they both should be encouraged
to
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for
in
 children.
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