While , some individuals believe that people feel unsafe at their a residence and also when they outside. There are several factors and solutions. I would discuss these both views in upcoming paragraph .

Firstly
,
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the reason why people are afraid of going out of their homes are very obvious
.
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the
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The
crime
committed on
streets
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the streets
are on a rise. The road accident
have risen
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has risen
to a proportion. It
increase
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increases
more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
before
.
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.
As well as individuals becoming scared within their
home
.
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Mostly the crimes being committed at houses
for
instance murder
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instance, murder
,
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,
robberies,
etcetera
.
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secondly some
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Secondly, some
Secondly some
people are afraid to go out because of natural calamities and
also
sometimes due to health related disorders which might be caused
of
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by
pollution.
However in
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However, in
a recent news article describe that more crimes committed by domestic help at
people
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peoples'
peoples
homes than the
crime
being committed on the streets
.
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In
addition everyday
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addition to everyday
people see news about
terror attacks
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the terror attacks
so they avoid
to go
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going
outside
.
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therefore
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Therefore
mankind
feel
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feels
insecure on
streets
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the streets
and
also
at
home
because they about domestic
crime
in
newspaper
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the newspaper
newspapers
a newspaper
. Contrary about to the statement there are certain solution of the problems
.
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moreover
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Moreover, government
Moreover government
government
and individuals take steps for
make
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making
people more safe and protected. The rising unemployment is the main reason of
these
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these crimes
this crime
crime
. If country are provided good vocational training and good job opportunities
,
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,
it will helpful to reduce
crime
.
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furthermore
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Furthermore, government
Furthermore government
government
increase security in public area by camera and more police patrolling
.
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.
this
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This
need is
also
in the residence area. The
last
but not least thing is that
government
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the government
should strictly punished the criminals
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.
it
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It
will incredible change to decrease the
crime
on the streets and at
home
.
and
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And
people use technology in security system. In the conclusion, nowadays individuals
are not feel
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are not feeling
do not feel
are not felt
comfortable at
home
and outside They afraid
from
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of
crime
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
government
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the government
provide
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provides
good facilities
.
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