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News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to write in newspapers.what factors influnce these decision? do you think we become used to bad news? should more good news be reported

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The newspaper and
television
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 are
source
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sources
 of information, it gave us information about
whole world
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the whole world
.
broadcast
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Broadcast
 on
television
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 and write in
newspspers
a daily or weekly publication on folded sheets; contains news and articles and advertisements
newspapers
 are decided by news editors, many factors
influnce
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influence
 these decisions, which
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 explain in following paragraphs,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think good news should be reported.
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First
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The first
 and the foremost factor is
,
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,
that the age of
audience
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the audience
,
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,
 the editors have noted that the age group of those who read the
newspspers
a daily or weekly publication on folded sheets; contains news and articles and advertisements
newspapers
 and those who watch
television
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, the generation
prefer
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prefers
 to audio and video
that is
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 available through
television
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 and the old generation prefer to read which is provided by
newspspers
a daily or weekly publication on folded sheets; contains news and articles and advertisements
newspapers
.
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Further more
in addition
Furthermore
, the political pressure
,
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,
 the editors have to under political parties, they are
controled
restrained or managed or kept within certain bounds
controlled
 by powerful
groups
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groups, hence
hence
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 they could not write and telecast the truth.
Moreover
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, the people are living in
information era
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an information era
the information era
, they impact with the daily
news including
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news, including
 good and bad from multimedia,
some times
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
 the media companies use the stories of people's personal life and they telecast the images
,
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,
violent
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violence
 and adverse content which affect the teenager's behaviour, it might be changed
,
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,
 they
shows
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show
 jealousy
,
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,
 violence and
some time
at some indefinite or unstated time
sometime
 they adapt
cpoycat
someone who copies the words or behavior of another
copycat
 phenomenon.
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, the role of the editor in reporting good news
such
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 as achievement of persons about their life, it should be
aknoeledegable
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.
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.
 In conclusion, while editors are inspired by the several
factor
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factors
 to make a decision about news, the good news can more effective than bad news.
print
Suggestion
Print
 and broadcast those news
that is
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benificial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 for human beings.
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