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The information below gives details about household income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in one UK city in 2010 and 2013.

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The table shows household
income
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 and expenditure on
food
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 and clothes in an average family in one UK city in 2010 and 2013, together with 2 pie charts giving more details on the spending areas, broken down into 5 groups: fruits and vegetables, meat and fish, dairy products, other
food
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 and drinks and
finally
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 clothes. Overall, total
income
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 had fallen during the time 2010 to 2013.
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, spending on
food
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 and clothes rose significantly and we have
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 seen some changes of the percentage in the areas they spend money on. Slightly under half of the total
income
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 in 2010 was spent on
food
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 and clothes, whilst it had the highest total
income
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, about 29,000 euro. Citizens at that
year mainly
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year, mainly
 spent their money
on
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in
 three areas: meat and fish (25%), clothes (22%), fruits and vegetables (20%).
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, other
food
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 and drinks and dairy products accounts for just under 20% (18% and 15
% respectively
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%, respectively
) and they
also
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 were the least spending areas in 2010.
On
Suggestion
In
By
 contrast,
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 total
income
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 had fallen, at around 4,000 euro in 2013,
expediture
money paid out; an amount spent
expenditure
 on
food
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 and clothes rose significantly to slightly over half of its
income
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. People tend to eat much more fruits and
vegetables
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vegetables, hence
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 the highest percentage. There is a significant decline in consuming meat and fish, by 25% to 15%.
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, daily products rose to 20% and it was no longer the least spending area while other
food
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 and drinks remains the same percentage at 18%.

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