Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals: during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people feel that religious festivals are becoming meaningless

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most people only wanting to enjoy themselves. I don’t agree with

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view. In my opinion, festivals are to be enjoyed.

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don’t think that people have forgotten their meaning. All traditional festivals teach and celebrate the good values of

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as morality and ethics. In my country,

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, people celebrate Diwali in a grand manner by wearing new clothes, giving and receiving presents, bursting crackers and preparing traditional foods which give them more enjoyment.

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, by decorating their homes with earthen

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sending out the message that we should dispel darkness from the world and our lives. Similar behaviour can be seen during the non-religious festivals like Bogi. People come together making bonfires, watching fireworks displays, and participating in the cultural events held in local parks. In my opinion, the argument that people have forgotten the meaning of

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the festivals

is meaningless. In schools, children are learning the reasons for celebrating festivals

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as Diwali, Navratri, Pongal, Easter, Id and Holi in their text books.

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, devotional singing and writing competitions are held to encourage the students to learn more about the religious festivals.

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, parents tell children interesting anecdotes about various festivals to ensure that they stay rooted in their culture. In conclusion, even in

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fast paced modern world, people are still celebrating their religious festivals with full of enthusiasm and joyfulness. Just because they are celebrating it does not mean that they have forgotten the values and messages of these festivals.

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Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals: during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Fossil fuels are the main source of energy in many countries. Using of other sources like solar power are encouraged.

You had dinner with a family friend. Write a letter to your friend to say What you liked about the dinner Your feelings about their family Invite your friend and their family to your place

Governments give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The rise of social media has affected personal relationships and society as a whole. Do the advantages of using social media for communication outweight the disadvantage?