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Environmental problems are serious in many countries. It means that the only possible way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

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We are quite aware of the rising issues with the environment nowadays as there is no
country
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 in the
world
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 which is not facing problems
such
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 as pollution or global warming.I partially agree with solving the issue at an international
level
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 and the essay will lay out the points for both. As environmental problems are becoming a global concern
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,
it is a mandate that these difficulties must be dealt at an international
level
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.The laws and rules
for
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of
 all the countries regarding the contribution towards the worsening weather conditions must be made and it must be checked that which nation is creating more pollution or waste and
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 the they must be penalised.It must be made compulsory for every
counry
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
county
 to organise sessions and events to make the common people aware of the havocs these problems can create. It is vital that the these issues must be dealt at an international
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level
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level, however
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 we cannot neglect the fact that every
country
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 must
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 deal with the issue at its own
level
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also
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.As every
country
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 has its own geographical conditions
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,
climate and with different type of industries
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,
each
country
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tend
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tends
 to produce different types of waste so they must
also
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 make rules to deal with the
inhouse
done within a business rather than contracted out
in-house
 issues on their own.It will be a vital step towards
acheiving
to gain with effort
achieving
 a healthy environment for the
world
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. With the drastic climatic changes that our
worls
everything that exists anywhere
world
 is
facing it
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facing, it
 is important that international laws are made to protect the
world
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,
and along with that every
country
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 must consider it as a major cause of concern and work towards the protection of
environment
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the environment
 so that our
next
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 generations can get a healthy
world
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 to live in.
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