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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Learning the foreign
language
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 at primary school as compared to
higher
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high
the high
 school is
adviced
having the benefit of careful prior consideration or counsel
advised
 by
few knowlegable people
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a few knowledgeable people
few knowledgeable people
.Like everything it
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also have
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also has
 some pros and cons in my opinion,
advantages
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the advantages
 are more in
qauntity
how much there is or how many there are of something that you can quantify
quantity
 than disadvantage. Looking at
positive side
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the positive side
, the students will be more developed intelligently,
intellectualyy
in an intellectual manner
intellectually
 and socially. We know a child's brain can be easily
molded
shaped to fit by or as if by altering the contours of a pliable mass (as by work or effort)
moulded
 in any directions, so if we can easily make him to study other languages without any trouble.
For example
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, when we teach a child
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
,
that is
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 totally
different what he
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different to what he
 is
hears
belonging to or associated with her
hers
 at home, a less effort is made as compared to elders.
in
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In
 the same way we can teach them various languages and can remember for his life. By learning it, he can go for higher studies outside his country without learning
there
of them or themselves
their
language
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. Like if he wishes to do his graduation in Germany its obligatory to learn and give exam in their native
language
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. Even can apply for various
job
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jobs
 in different countries and chances of
promoyion
a message issued in behalf of some product or cause or idea or person or institution
promotion
also
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 get increased.
For instance
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, if there are two candidates for single post belong to same countries head of the company will prefer him as compare to
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 as less effort has to be made to make him understand. Friend circles will automatically get
increaded
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 because understanding between them will be good, by conveying each others
emotions
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emotion
 perfectly. Observing
nagative
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
, the students in
higher
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high
 schools already have so many subjects to learn so it becomes hectic for them to learn extra subject. Like already said for outside
education
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education, language
language
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 has to be learned which is difficult at
this
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 stage as
brain
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the brain
 can not
cop
come to terms with
cope
 up with
this
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 pressure
also
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. In conclusion, noticing above two
condition
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conditions
 its clear merits weighted more than demerits. So better to start teaching it at
lower classes
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the lower classes
 than higher one.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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