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Nowadays many countries have very cosmopolitan cities with people from all over the world. How can the government ensure that all these people can live together harmoniously?

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Diversity is the asset of many countries as they open their arms to
immegrants
a person who comes to a country where they were not born in order to settle there
immigrants
 and visitors from all over the world.
Governments
Suggestion
The governments
 of these countries should make every effort to ensure that all people regardless of their origin are living together
consistantly
in a systematic or consistent manner
consistently
constantly
. One method to
achive
to gain with effort
achieve
that is
 by teaching
forign
of concern to or concerning the affairs of other nations (other than your own)
foreign
 cultures and languages in schools, as making the children learn about other
cultures enables
Accept comma addition
cultures, enables
 them to maintain an open mind when dealing with other nationalities and learning other languages will help in decreasing the linguistic
parriers
a structure or object that impedes free movement
barriers
 with
forigners
a person who comes from a foreign country; someone who does not owe allegiance to your country
foreigners
.
Moreover
, the governments can provide maps in several languages for free to aid people when moving through the city.
Furthermore
, posting videos and educational materials for domestic citizens on how to deal with different points of view and how to accept other cultures and religions
with out
in absence of
without
 prejudice can help in reducing some the
parriers
a structure or object that impedes free movement
barriers
 that might be encountered.
Finally
, governments can help in providing and building places for
worshipers
a person who has religious faith
worshippers
 from all over the world to able to practice their religion freely and without restrictions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cosmopolitan
  • inclusive policies
  • cultural exchange
  • integration
  • community centers
  • anti-discrimination
  • awareness campaigns
  • support systems
  • diversity
  • equal opportunities
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