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The chart below gives information about Someland's main exports in 2005, 2015, and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about Someland's main exports in 2005, 2015, and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #someland #exports #future #projections #summarise #features #comparisons
The bar chart illustrates information had constitute in 2005 and 2015 about
Someland
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Homeland
 main exports. It
also
 indicates future projections for 2025.
According to
 the data, it is
seem
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seen
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that
the
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apply
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international
tourism
 will increase in 2025
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,
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unlike the other two productions
who
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which
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 were shown
in
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to
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decrease
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a decrease
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 in the future.
Moreover
, in 2005,
the
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apply
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international
tourism
were
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was
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also
siginficantily
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significantly
 higher with over
than
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apply
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6
usd
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USD
bilion
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billion
 followed by dairy
products
 which
was
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were
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 around 5
bilion
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billion
.
While
,
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apply
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 the meat
products
 were the lowest .
In contrast
 to 2005. In 2015 ,
the
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apply
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 dairy
products
 were the highest with
approximetale
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approximately
 8
bilion
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billion
 which is 3
time
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times
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more or less than
the
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apply
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meat
products
.
However
,
the
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apply
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international
tourism
 has
growing
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grown
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about
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by about
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 1
bilion
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billion
than
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more than
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 it was in 2005. In conclusion,
it is clear that
 in
somelands
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some lands
homelands
 the prime export is
the
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apply
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international
tourism
. As reported by the chart,
the
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apply
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international
tourism
 had
rise
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risen
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 since 2005 and it will continue rising in the future to reach the highest point 8 billion
dollar
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dollars
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourism, bilion, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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