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Some people think watching movies is a waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #movies #waste #time
It is
individual’s choice
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the individual’s choice
an individual’s choice
 that which mode of
hobby
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the hobby
hobbies
 he/she likes to pursue in
thier
of them or themselves
their
 spare
time
. While some people believe that watching film is
waste
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a waste
 of
time
, I agree with those who argue that it has certain benefits too.
To begin
 with, an average movie consumed
atleast
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at least
 2 hours
time
, and in modern day life, people often do not have enough
time
 to spend on them. The reason for
this
 is that they have other major things to do
such
 as managing office work and taking care of family members. So, where
time
 is a crucial commodity, people want to
spent
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spend
 it wisely and consider movies as
waste
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a waste
 of
time
.
Instead
 of going for picture, busy people often go for
walk
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a walk
 or do
yoga which
Accept comma addition
yoga, which
 is
healthier
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the healthy
 alternative and
also
 takes less toll on their schedule.
However
, I feel that movies are
most effective way
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the most effective way
 of getting brake from routine life.
This
 is because it allows spectators to dwell in a realm of fantasy.
Moreover
, it
is
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is also a means of
is also meant of
is also meant meant of
also
 means of getting socialized as people often go for
movie
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a movie
movies
 with friends and family. And top of it, some motivational movies which are based on some real life events inspire people to chase their dream.
For instance
, “Dangal” film is a story of a woman wrestler who hails from
remote village
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remote villages
a remote village
 and rises to win an international competition. In conclusion,
although
 watching
movie
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the movie
 may be a
time
 consuming task, I feel that the pros like
time
 off from routine, good option for socializing and a source of motivation make movies worth watching.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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