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Today, it is very common to have people from two different generations mix in the same workplace. Are there more advantages or disadvantages to this situation? Give your own opinion and include relevant examples.

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Nowadays we have seen the trend that that people of different age
work
 together in the same
company
 which may cause benefits to the companies and individuals but there are some disadvantages. In
this
 essay I will discuss its pros and cons and at the end will give my opinion.
To begin
 with,
first
 of all working together in the same
workplace there
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workplace, there
 might be different employers like junior and senior of different thinking. Sometimes we have seen the fact that
senior employee
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the senior employee
a senior employee
often ignore
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often ignores
 junior candidates to assist them properly when they are in some difficulties about task to perform
as result
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as a result this
this
 will bring negative consequences to the
company
.
In addition
 fresh graduate or internee or junior employee feel isolated which will be dangerous for him in
long term
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the long term
 in the form of finding
work
 in another
company
.
Secondly
, employee working
in
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on
 the same platform will bring positive consequences if all compromises
to
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work
work
 together in
group
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a group
groups
 and friendly. Not only
company
 will be beneficial
also
 the employees who
work
 there.
For instance
 nestle one of the best and good reputed
company
 across the country where most of the people
work
 together in a
groups
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group
 that contain seniors of age over 40 and internee under 26 years old. All senior staff transfers their
work
 to junior candidates where they perform tasks according to
instruction
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instructions
the instruction
 provided by senior authority. In
this
 way senior worker reduced their workload and junior gained practical experience,
furthermore
company
 will grow and give
best output
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the best output
. In conclusion, despite the minor disadvantages working together from older candidates in the form of
discrimination
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discrimination, however
however
 performing in a group and equal assignment of
work
 can cause
good effect
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a good effect
good effects
 to the companies and employees.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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