Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. Reason for this? Some solutions.

Nowadays, juvenile delinquency seems to become the buzzword in
this
millennium, owning to the fact that children have been unintentionally imparted by both family and community in the unconscious way. In my own perspective, the corporation clung by both mentioned factors would be the best efficacy to alleviate
this
issue in various metropolises. Family and surrounding environment are accredited as the pivotal reasons affecting on
this
commonness of young criminals.
Firstly
, with the sole aim of pursuing money, a myriad of families might give less, or even no cherish and well-orientated management for their children who is too vulnerable and innocent to be gradually intrigued by the social evils.
This
would be the negative prerequisite for joining the juvenile delinquent group of the young. Simultaneously, the daily reiteration of national news about
criminal
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crime
or violence-related
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
behaviour
shown on mass media gadgets,
such
as television and
smartphone
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smartphones
, is another contributing factor
from
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for
public
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the public
. No sooner did the young generation
inveterately
interact with the notorious information than the norm of these actions would be unconsciously established in their mind and developing
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
.
As a result
, the emergence of youth crime
are
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is
more and more prevalent. To deal with
this
sparkle problem, the solution would be carried out by both micro and macro factor, family and public. With the closer approach, mother or father should spend more time concerning about their offspring regularly. Were
this
method put into use in time, these parents, would acknowledge the bad
influencers
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influences
, social evils, and be able to hamper or stop it immediately, which is as same as the educating-orientation for child of Japanese.
Additionally
, as the underlying appraisal,
social media composer
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the social media composer
a social media composer
social media composers
should reveal more benevolent gestures
instead
of illegal ones to pique the youth being a useful
people
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person
. By means of integration of contributing factors, mankind would be capable of reducing the juvenile delinquency. As aforementioned explanations, public, in general, and single family,
in particular
, should pay more attention on educating the young generation.
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