In some countries young people are encouraged to travel or work for a year between finishing the high school and starting universities studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decides to do this.

Young age is the most suitable time to learn new things because during
this
phase people are more quick and more
susciptible
(often followed by 'of' or 'to') yielding readily to or capable of
susceptible
to adaptation. Considering the same, many countries are emphasizing on juveniles to explore the opportunity based on their interest in doing work or touring around new places for
an
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a
year
. In
this
essay, I am going to discuss the pros and cons of
this
footstep. To start with, many provinces are encouraging young people to work for
an
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a
year
before joining any university. It not only helps them in learning expense
management but
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management, but
also
helps in attaining
maturity level
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the maturity level
at
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in
of
workplace
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the workplace
. Alongside, it may
also
lead
one
to experiment various fields based on its areas of interests and, on the basis of the same, can prepare a roadmap for his/her career.
This
period can help in deciding which stream would be helpful in
future
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the future
and which wouldn't.
In addition
, many states like Norway inspire youngsters to visit foreign lands.
Such
methods
makes
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make
a person to re-invent himself on the basis of surroundings.
Also
, it enables them to learn new culture and while doing so, if required, can adapt a new living style which could be helpful to their home country as well.
Such
activity
may led
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may lead
to
buidling
a structure that has a roof and walls and stands more or less permanently in one place
building
experience
in
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at
different times.
On the other hand
,
such
procdures
a particular course of action intended to achieve a result
procedures
procedure
before joining college may cause
an
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a
year
break in studies.
Resultingly
, other competitors may move ahead in terms of studies. It could be frustrating with whom
one
used to share the class,
are
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is
one
year
ahead. To recapitulate with, it is good for young students to roam or
induldge
give free rein to
indulge
in some project before joining any educational establishment. As it not only helps in finding the correct route for
future but
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the future, but
the future but
also
helps in making
one
more robust by adapting to different situations.
Although
, it may
toll
express in words
tell
a
one
year
loss in
studies but
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studies, but
considering the positive aspects of the same, can be taken up
further
. After all, Decisions
takes
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take
us to destiny.
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